If we look towards East, especially Asia, we find a number of frightening stories that sound authentic. In Japan, there is a legend about a samurai’s wife called Kuchisake Onna. It is said that she cheated on her husband with another man, and as a punishment, her husband cut open her mouth to twice its size. It is said that her spirit still haunts the country. She approaches her victim wearing a coat and a mask and asks, “Am I pretty?” If the victim answers her ‘yes’, she takes off her mask and repeats her question. If the victim seems horrified or screams, she cuts his mouth with a knife and kills him.
Below are sample essays I have received from your classmates. For each essay, I'll post at least a couple examples of papers with my comments so that you get a sense of what I am looking for. I intend my comments to be constructive, and they may sound harsh or sometimes appear sarcastic, but I read these drafts trying to be a typical reader, giving a sentence-by-sentence run-down of what's going through my head. In essence I am having a mental dialog with these papers, and my comments range from notes about the content and structure to grammar and usage.