Great post Mark! I like how you used an actual prompt example to help students organize their thoughts better when writing a college essay. There’s a blog post on http:/// that includes more general things that your college essay should say about yourself that students can apply to all prompts as well. You can find it here http:///how-to-write-the-perfect-college-essay-5-things-it-should-say-about-you/ . There’s other college advice on there too about how to master the admissions process and even tips how to format your resume for college applications. Good stuff!
No matter which essay option you choose, keep in mind the purpose of the essay. The college to which you are applying uses the Common Application which means the school has holistic admissions . The college wants to get to know you as a person, not just as a list of SAT scores and grades . Make sure your essay captures YOU. The admissions folks should finish reading your essay with a much clearer sense of who you are and what it is that interests and motivates you. Also, make sure your essay paints a positive portrait. The admissions folks are considering inviting you to join their community. They will not want to extend an invitation to someone who comes across as insensitive, self-centered, boastful, narrow-minded, unimaginative or indifferent.